{"id":111,"date":"2026-05-05T23:54:22","date_gmt":"2026-05-06T03:54:22","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/openstudio.pub\/essaywriting\/chapter\/chapter-13-revising-documenting\/"},"modified":"2026-05-24T21:55:21","modified_gmt":"2026-05-25T01:55:21","slug":"chapter-13-revising-documenting","status":"publish","type":"chapter","link":"https:\/\/openstudio.pub\/academicwriting_1\/chapter\/chapter-13-revising-documenting\/","title":{"raw":"Chapter 13: Revising & Documenting","rendered":"Chapter 13: Revising & Documenting"},"content":{"raw":"
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Documenting Information Sources<\/strong><\/h2>\r\nThere are a number of different documentation systems. Chapter 8 introduced the American Psychological Association (APA) format. Below is basic information on how to document a source in the reference list using the APA format. For further details, see Appendix 4.\r\n

\u00a0I. Book (more than one author)<\/strong><\/span><\/p>\r\n

Family name, Initials., & Family Name, Initials. (year). Title.<\/em> Publisher.<\/p>\r\n

II. Web-based Newspaper\/Magazine<\/strong><\/span><\/p>\r\n

Family name, Initials. (year, Month day). Title. Name of Publication<\/em>. URL<\/span><\/p>\r\n

III. Non-English Source (academic journal article)<\/span><\/strong><\/p>\r\n

Family name, Initials. (year). Original title written using English alphabet [English translation]. Journal Title,<\/em> Volume<\/em>(Number), pages. URL<\/span><\/p>\r\n \r\n\r\n<\/div>\r\n<\/div>\r\n

Practice It!<\/strong><\/em><\/h1>\r\nExercise 1: For source a and b, rewrite the information into the correct APA reference list format in the space provided below.<\/strong><\/em>\r\n\r\n\r\n<\/em>Source a (journal article online)<\/strong>\r\nArticle title: \u30c7\u30fc\u30bf\u30fb\u30b5\u30a4\u30a8\u30f3\u30c6\u30a3\u30b9\u30c8\u304c\u30d3\u30c3\u30b0\u30c7\u30fc\u30bf\u3067\u79c1\u305f\u3061\u306e\u672a\u6765\u3092\u5275\u308b\r\nAuthor: \u6a0b\u53e3\u77e5\u4e4b\r\nVolume: 56\r\nNumber: 1\r\nYear of publication: 2013 \u5e74\r\nJournal title: \u60c5\u5831\u7ba1\u7406\r\nPages: 2-11\r\nURL: http:\/\/dx.doi.org\/10.1241\/johokanri.56.2\r\n\r\nSource b (magazine online)<\/strong>\r\n\r\nTitle: Do scientists need an AI Hippocratic oath? Maybe. Maybe not\r\nAuthor: Susan D\u2019Agostino\r\nDate: June 9, 2022\r\nURL: https:\/\/thebulletin.org\/\r\nName of publication: Bulletin of the Atomic Scientists\r\n

References<\/strong><\/h2>\r\nExercise 2: Which documentation format is used in your area of study? Compare that format with the examples from the APA above.<\/strong><\/em>\r\n\r\n \r\n\r\n \r\n\r\n \r\n\r\n \r\n\r\n \r\n\r\n
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Revising an Essay<\/strong><\/h2>\r\nExercise 3: Read the following body paragraph and the teacher's comments. Use the comments to improve the paragraph.\"\"<\/strong><\/em>\r\n\r\n \r\n\r\nCorrections\r\n\r\n1) ________________________________\u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a06) ________________________________\r\n\r\n2) ________________________________\u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a07) ________________________________\r\n\r\n3) ________________________________\u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 8) ________________________________\r\n\r\n4) ________________________________\u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 9) ________________________________\r\n\r\n5) ________________________________\u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 \u00a0 10) _______________________________\r\n\r\n \r\n
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What\u2019s in a name?<\/strong><\/h2>\r\n \r\n\r\n<\/div>\r\n<\/div>\r\n<\/div>\r\nYou already know that an author\u2019s last name (family name) is normally used when citing sources. However, this can be slightly confusing if you are unfamiliar with names of different origins. Japanese names are typically listed by last name followed by the first name (e.g., Kyodai Yoko). But many online sources or book covers will list names in the opposite order, starting with the person\u2019s first name. There is no quick solution to identify what is a person\u2019s first or last name, but simply being aware of this issue is a starting point. When in doubt, look it up!\r\n
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\r\n\r\nHow to spell Japanese names?<\/strong>\r\nWhenever you write reports and essays at university, you will likely use some Japanese-language sources or write about a Japanese topic or concept. If the essay is written in English, you will need to romanize Japanese words and names. There are a few different ways to write Japanese sounds with the English alphabet. Below are some points to keep in mind when you need to write Japanese names or words in an English text:\r\n